Maintaining public libraries is now a waste of money since computer technology is already replacing their function. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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think people Change the capitalization
I
believe
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have believed
keep
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staying
labraries
in nowadays is the unuseless of money and Correct your spelling
laboratories
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a wastage
wastage
of time Replace the word
waste
due to
innovation
of modern items like Correct article usage
the innovation
computer
, Fix the agreement mistake
computers
laptop
and smartphones. Fix the agreement mistake
laptops
Which available
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Available
everybooks
and all the things which can be seen in the Correct your spelling
every books
every book
library
. For
my Change preposition
From
prespective
, Correct your spelling
perspective
i
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I
partillay refere
the technology in some situations. Correct your spelling
partly refer
For instance
during travelling.Some drawbacks of non availability
of Add a hyphen
non-availability
library
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the library
is
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are
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a silence
silence
environment and peaceful time.
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silent
To begin
with, i
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I
am strongly believe
that mobile phones have all Change the verb form
strongly believe
tha
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the
capability
which Fix the agreement mistake
capabilities
are
available in Change the verb form
is
libraries
. Also
mobile Add a comma
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phone
have some specific Fix the agreement mistake
phones
size
that we can use Fix the agreement mistake
sizes
them
everywhere. Correct pronoun usage
apply
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, the curical
advantage of mobile currently Correct your spelling
crucial
cortical
that
we Add a missing verb
is that
cam
use in travelling. Correct your spelling
can
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travelling now you can read everything Change preposition
While
realted
to knowledge and experience which Correct your spelling
related
can
only available in the past in Verb problem
was
the
public Correct article usage
apply
libraries
.
Secondly
, i
can say that Change the capitalization
I
library
have some benefits that can not be achieved in Fix the agreement mistake
libraries
others
places. I really appreciated the environment of Correct quantifier usage
other
library
which is totally silence which impacts Add an article
the library
a library
alot
of our Correct your spelling
a lot
brain
during Fix the agreement mistake
brains
study
. Add an article
the study
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, I think the only area in which humans cam
release Correct your spelling
can
the
stress he through everything Correct article usage
apply
what
is going on in Change the word
that
his
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their
he
just Correct pronoun usage
apply
focuse
on the target Correct your spelling
focus
focuses
focused
what
can they read and learn. Correct word choice
and what
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is Add an article
The library
also
the advantage of non disturbance
in technology have Add a hyphen
non-disturbance
otherwise
software like WhatsApp,Facebook and youtube which can be
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apply
distrub
you during Correct your spelling
disturb
disturbed
study
.
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the study
To sum up
, the
technology Correct article usage
apply
have
a lot of benefits during Change the verb form
has
study
and nowadays the young generation is very busy Add an article
the study
in
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with
his
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their
smart phone
and Correct your spelling
smartphone
like
to Change the verb form
likes
study
in
laptops, computers and smartphones Change preposition
on
instead
of libraries
. But elder people mostly like the Change preposition
in libraries
libraries
for the relaxation and to get the knowledge in safety.Submitted by khastafojiii on
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