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The map below shows the plan of a proposed new town.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below shows the plan of a proposed new town.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The scheme demonstrates the design of a new city. The city’s plan consists of six parts.
However
 it has
two
 industrial parts, it has housing, roads, parking,
bas
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bus
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 station, recreational area.
For instance
, there are
two
 industrial parts in the city where people work.
One
 of them is in the north-east, and the other in the south-west.
Two
 roads lead to them - a circular
one
 and a central
one
. There are
two
 bus stops on the central street. And
also
, the city is quite full of settlements, on the central street there are six houses,
two
 parking lots and four recreation areas. Behind the ring
road
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road,
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 there are ten more houses and
one
 recreation area. Houses and industry are separated by wide roads. In general, the city’s plan is well-organised and comfortable for people. It’s satisfying
need
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the need
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 to work, live and rest.
Additionally
, outlive has
great
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a great
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per growths
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per-growth
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 perspective
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