Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest time of most people lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, inspite of great responsibilities. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion?

A group of
idividuals
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individuals
present the view that
teenager
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teenagers
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are more happy than
adults
,
whereas
other
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others
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believe that people are more satisfied
about
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their lives when they are
adult
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adults
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. I strongly agree with the latter
opiniopn
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opinion
. On the one hand, some people justifiably argue that they can enjoy
from
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life when they are
adult
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adults
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. They are in
believ
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believe
belief
that
adults
often have income and are independent.
Thus
, they can make
decision
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decisions
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regardless of their
parents
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parent's
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opinions.
T hy
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They
are old enough to travel alone.
Such
individuals are able to spend their money on whatever they want.
As a result
, there is no pressure on them and they can make
decision
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decisions
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about their futures. Having
such
freedom
provide
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provides
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them happiness. As an example,
parents
in some cases force children to
choos
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choose
their entertainment
according to
parent's
desieres
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desires
. It is possible that a teenager wants to play football
while
their
parents
force them to play a musical instrument.
On the other hand
,
an other
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another
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group of people claim that they have
more
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a more
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joyful time in their teenage years as they have
less
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fewer
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responsibilities in
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to
sdults
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adults
. They do not
necessarly
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necessarily
need to have
incom
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income
as their
parents
provide them with money. Supporting family members in hard
situation
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situations
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is really demanding and nobody
expect
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children to solve hard problems.
Adults
should be always there for family members.
Teenager
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Teenagers
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are often
easy going
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easygoing
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and do not
every thing
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everything
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serious
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seriously
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.
Therefore
, they have less stressful lives.
However
, I do not find
this
argument convincing as
adults
have
broaden
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broadened
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horizons
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their horizons
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an are and are able reach to huge dreams.
For instance
, they can have a dream
for
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of
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going to dangerous places, like high rise
mountain
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mountains
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,
while
teenagers often are not allowed to go to
such
places.
To conclude
, in my view, individuals are more happy when they are
adult
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adults
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. They can earn money and spend it in every field that they want.
Moreover
,
adults
are more
proable
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likely
to reach their dreams and enjoy them.
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