Individuals should improve the environment or is it the government and large companies that should take action? agree or disagree.

Some people argue that
the
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ordinary citizens should take
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action
,
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because it is their responsibility to upgrade the
environment
, but others believe that it is
obligation
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of huge companies and
government
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the government
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.
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is completely agree
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that the
government
should take care of
environment
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the environment
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, and I am going to provide some reasons, arguments and examples for it. First of all, it is obvious that all factories and large enterprises cause plenty of
pollutions
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and problems
into
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the Earth, and they
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controlled only by
government
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.
Therefore
, administrations should ensure those buildings with some stuff to stop these contaminations and keep our planet in safety.
For instance
, in Switzerland rulers provide factories with filters that will not transfer all pollution to air and water which citizens consume, so that their
nature
is completely neat, and the air is immaculate.
Secondly
, governments need to add some strict rules to the country, so they are
also
accountable for making them. Since people
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too for the purity and protection of
environment
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, the laws will affect all the residents, and the
nature
of
this
nation will be saved.
For example
, in Kazakhstan
government
made some rules about
nature
protection,
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residents will get penalties and maybe cruel punishments
according to
their violation of laws. After the announcement of these
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the ratio of emissions significantly decreased. In conclusion, rulers should take care of
environment
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, so that they have all
opportunities
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to do it.
However
, individuals
also
need to look after
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their deeds, because they have
large
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impact on
safety
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the safety
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of
nature
.
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