The Chart shows the number of visitors to a local cinema according to age in 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The pie chart shows the percentages of people of different ages who visited a local cinema in 2000.

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55 and older constituted the highest proportion.

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