The graph shows the number of people taking parts in 4 kinds of sports in a particular region between 1985 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the number of people taking parts in 4 kinds of sports in a particular region between 1985 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart illustrates amounts of humans that practice four various kinds of sport namely basketball, tennis , badminton and rugby from
year
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1985 to 2005.
Overall
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, the most significant feature is
about
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that
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the
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basketball and badminton
players
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figures changed slightly throughout the 20 years
while
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rugby
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in rugby
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and tennis
which
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apply
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the
number
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of
the
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apply
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players
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swapped dramatically.
To begin
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with
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the numbers
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numbers
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number
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of
practicer of
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practising
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rugby sports
were
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apply
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records
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record
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the highest
number
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in the
year
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1985 at roughly 250
then
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the
number
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dropped sharply to 50
players
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at the end
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of the period.
However
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, tennis
players
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numbers were 150 after twenty years
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number
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the number
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increased gradually to 220
players
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in the
year
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2005.
On the other hand
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, badminton
players
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figure
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apply
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were
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was
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approximately 50 in the
year
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1985 and remained the same till the end of time with
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a slightly
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slightly changed
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slight change
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also
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basketball games
players
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were I
totally
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total
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almost
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of almost
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75 and
this
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number
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didn't change from the
year
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1985 to 2005.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words year, players, number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • participation rate
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • peak
  • stable
  • comparative analysis
  • dominance
  • decline
  • steady growth
  • significant change
  • regional popularity
  • time period
  • sports activities
  • data representation
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