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Band 2.5

You are due to start a new job next week but you will not be able to because you have some problems.

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Dear , Manager I am writing
this
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 letter to inform you that I can not come
for
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 work
for
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apply
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this
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week
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 because of my injury. I was about to come to meet you
last
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week
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 to ask you
that
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apply
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about my schedule for the upcoming
week
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.
While
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 I was coming
due to
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 heavy rain my leg was slightly injured because of slippery roads. I already saw my physician about
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, he advised me that I should take care my
self
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myself
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 for at least one
week
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.So, I will not be able to come
at
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 work
for
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next
week
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. If it's there is any video completion
which
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I need to
taken
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 of it. Please let me know because I will have free time.So, I can utilize that time to become more productive and informative. I waiting for your response.If you need anything from my side, please don't hesitate. Thanks
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Your
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 sincerely Fal
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grammar
Ensure that all sentences are grammatically correct. There are a few grammatical errors that affect the clarity of your message.
content
Be more detailed in explaining your situation and offering solutions. This will make your letter more comprehensive.
coherence
Use more transitional phrases to improve the flow of your letter. This will make it easier for the reader to follow your train of thought.
tone
Your letter could benefit from a more formal tone. For instance, you could address the manager properly at the beginning of the letter.
typography
There are some minor typographical errors that you should watch out for, such as missing space after periods and commas.
content
Your letter has a clear introduction explaining the issue at hand.
initiative
You offer to still be productive by working on video completion tasks, demonstrating your willingness to stay engaged despite the injury.
attitude
You directly address the need for assistance in case the manager needs anything from you, showing a proactive attitude.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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