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Below is a map of the city of Brandfield. City planners have decided to build a new shopping mall for the area, and two sites, $1 and $2 have been proposed.

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The map below illustrates two potential locations (S1 and S2) for a new shopping mall in a
city
 called Brandfield. The main difference between the two sites is that S1 is located near the Housing
estate
 including the Golf Course and park from the left in the north of the
city
,
whereas
 S2 is in close proximity to the Industrial
estate
 and at the same distance from the Golf Course park. Both locations are relatively near the
city
 centre. Looking at the information in more detail, S1 is surrounded by railway and arterial roads
as well as
 the river,
moreover
, its positioning might be advantageous for the residents of
housing
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estate
 living nearby. It can
also
 be noted that S1 is slightly nearer to the
city
 centre compared to S2. The alternative choice S2
along with
 S1 has
an
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access to the roadway, making it easier for people to get to the shopping mall, without having to cross the river
in contrast
 to S1. Both locations are equally practical,
however
, S2 is on the left from the Industrial
estate
 and Golf Course and the park on the left.
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introduction conclusion present
Provide a clearer introduction and conclusion to give the essay a well-defined structure.
relevant specific examples
Use more specific examples to illustrate the points you are making about each site.
logical structure
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear, single main idea to improve overall cohesion.
complete response
The essay covers both sites and provides relevant information about their locations and potential advantages.
logical structure
The information is generally well-organized and follows a logical sequence.
clear comprehensive ideas
The writer makes an effort to compare the two sites and discuss various factors for consideration.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban planning
  • infrastructure
  • residential areas
  • economic impact
  • accessibility
  • traffic congestion
  • public transportation
  • environmental implications
  • sustainability
  • commercial development
  • site comparison
  • local community
  • consumer behavior
  • retail ecosystem
  • zoning regulations
  • footfall
  • parking facilities
  • green spaces
  • land use
  • civic amenities
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