The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned

future development of the site.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and

make comparisons where relevant.
The maps illustrate how the industrial estate of Norbiton is expected to be redeveloped from its existing condition.
Overall
, the manufacturing area is planned to face major redevelopment, notably the addition of different kinds of settlement areas, public facilities, and new
road
networks, at the expense of some farmland areas in the northern part of the estate. At present, the industrial area consists of
factories
surrounding the roundabout and a main
road
running to the east side with another
road
in the south. In the north, there is a river which separates the
factories
and the farmland
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further north
. The future will look significantly different, with the
factories
being converted into housing estates and public facilities with the addition of new roads. With the extra
road
on the west side of the roundabout, the
factories
will be transformed into housing estates and shops.
Similarly
, on the east side,
factories
along the
road
are going to be redeveloped into other housing estates, a playground, and a school alongside the newly constructed medical centre in the southeast of the roundabout. In the north, a bridge will be constructed, and across the river, there will be settlement areas which compromise the farmland.
Moreover
, there is
also
going to be a smaller roundabout in the south of the existing one.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • planned future development
  • factories
  • warehouses
  • railway line
  • shopping center
  • residential buildings
  • college
  • mixed-use zone
  • commercial
  • residential
  • educational
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian walkways
  • housing
  • community
  • retail services
  • revitalize
  • quality of life
  • vibrant
  • sustainable
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