The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.
The given graph illustrates data about the percentage of the residents in four Asian
countries
living in cities in 50 year
span
from 1970 to 2020.Add a hyphen
50-year
Furthermore
, it gives expectations for 2030 and 2040.
Overall
, Malaysia's population
will shoot up in the future scoring the highest percentage ever.On the other hand
,
Thailand will go up in the next few years but it won't be enough and it will be the smallest population
among the four countries
.
In 1980, all the countries
had had upward trend for 10 years.To illustrate, the Philippines surged about 20 per cent achieving the highest population
in this
span.In addition
,all the other countries
had a balanced increase.For example
, Malaysia rose about 5% and both Thailand and Indonesia go
up about 10%.
In 2040, every country will score its own peak in Wrong verb form
went
population
.For instance
, the Philippines will soar a further
80% and Indonesia will go up achieving 60%.Moreover
, Thailand will rise to 30%.Submitted by seifhasseb222 on
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