The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.
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The given graph illustrates data about the percentage of the residents in four Asian
countries
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living in cities in
50 year
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span from 1970 to 2020.
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, it gives expectations for 2030 and 2040.
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, Malaysia's
population
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will shoot up in the future scoring the highest percentage ever.
On the other hand
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, Thailand will go up in the next few years but it won't be enough and it will be the smallest
population
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among the four
countries
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. In 1980, all the
countries
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had had upward trend for 10 years.To illustrate, the Philippines surged about 20 per cent achieving the highest
population
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in
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span.
In addition
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,all the other
countries
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had a balanced increase.
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, Malaysia rose about 5% and both Thailand and Indonesia
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up about 10%. In 2040, every country will score its own peak in
population
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.
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, the Philippines will soar a
further
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80% and Indonesia will go up achieving 60%.
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, Thailand will rise to 30%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, population with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "illustrates" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "go up" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • graph
  • percentage
  • population
  • Asian countries
  • living in cities
  • 1970
  • 2020
  • predictions
  • 2030
  • 2040
  • introduction
  • overview
  • trend
  • body paragraph
  • compare
  • predicted percentages
  • summarize
  • closing statement
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