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In many countries plastic bags are the main source of rubbish causing pollutions in oceans and on land; therefore they should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

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plastic
 bags is a controversial topic all over the world. I personally believe that banning the use
plastic
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of plastic
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 products is absolutely right for two very important reasons.
Firstly
, I believe that taking out
plastic
 bags is right because it will reduce
the
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pollution. Most people who care about the
environment
 would agree that
plastic
 has negative effects on marine life, which means that animals in marine life are dead because of
the
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plastic
 products. It
also
 impacts water sources, which would definitely impact human health.
Consequently
,
plastic
 should be banned in the public interest. Another crucial reason why I think that
plastic
 should be banned is the
cost
 of
cleanup
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cleaning
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 the
environment
 after consuming
plastic
. It is true that the
cost
 of
plastic
 is cheaper than any other alternatives,
while
 it causes more pollution than others, which means that banning
plastic
 would help countries reduce the
cost
 of cleanup.
This
 is highly beneficial for economics.
However
, there are those who say that banning
plastic
 bags is wrong because it is easier for individuals to use
it
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them
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 and it is less expensive than other alternatives. Yet,
this
 is not justifiable because even if it
cost
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costs
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 less to buy it would
cost
 more to help the
environment
. In conclusion, for the above reasons,
it is clear that
 there are extremely strong reasons to support the view that it should be illegal to use
plastic
 because it is clearly detrimental
for
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 both the
environment
 and the economy.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pollution
  • rubbish
  • marine life
  • ecosystems
  • ingestion
  • entanglement
  • biodegradable
  • reusable
  • contaminated
  • environmental footprint
  • legislation
  • economic impact
  • cleanup
  • alternatives
  • disposable
  • ban
  • implement
  • sustainability
  • health risks
  • ecosystem disruption
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