In a number of countries some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing high speed railway lines for inter-city travel. Others believe this money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

It is believed that it is better to allocate a significant amount of money to building
high speed
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railway
lines
for
traveling
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between neighbourhoods in
city
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. Some others claim that
this
budget should
be spend
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on old public
transpot
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transport
improvement. I agree with the opinion of the benefits of spending money on
new
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transportation
system
for some reasons which will be discussed in
this
essay. Obviously, the time people spend
on
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traveling
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inside a city can be reduced by using cutting-edge
high speed
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trains, and it is the first reason I support the idea.
Furthermore
, new infrastructures can be built based on the latest technology available to increase efficiency and convenience.
Finally
, creating something new is faster and easier than repairing an existing
system
such
as
transportation
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system
, as repairing needs the determination of the problem first and
then
solving it.
In contrast
,
construction
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of an entire
system
like railway
lines
from
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the first place does not require
the
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time
spending
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on finding the problem. It only demands
engeneerings
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engineering
engineerings
to plan the scheme and start.
On the other hand
, some existing public transport sections,
such
as vehicles, stations and
lines
,
may be
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noticeably outdated so they cannot be maintained and improved properly.
Therefore
, spending the available funding on them is a waste of money. It is better to leave the old-fashioned transport
system
as it is. In conclusion, the funding
allocating
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to constructing a new web of railway
lines
for
high speed
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subways can help citizens to travel in a city in a shorter time, and It is
also
more comfortable and faster.
Moreover
, it can cut down the energy of distinguishing an issue in the existing transport
system
.
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task achievement
Ensure that all ideas are clearly presented and elaborated upon. Better examples and more comprehensive analysis for both sides of the argument will strengthen the essay.
coherence cohesion
Avoid repetitions and ensure that each paragraph follows logically from the previous one. Transitions between sentences and paragraphs could be smoother.
coherence cohesion
The essay presents a clear introduction and conclusion, which provides a structured layout.
task achievement
The argument for high-speed railway construction is reasonably developed, with some relevant points provided to support the perspective.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • high-speed rail
  • inter-city travel
  • economic growth
  • environmentally friendly
  • carbon emissions
  • public transportation infrastructure
  • reliability
  • service frequency
  • cost-effective
  • initial investment
  • accessibility
  • underserved areas
  • regional needs
  • budget constraints
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