The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart gives information about the number of aged 65 and over in
Japan
, the
USA
and
Sweden
from 1940 to 2040. In general, the percentage of elderly people increases sharply over the
centery
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century
in all the countries.
In addition
,
initially
,
Japan
had the lowest proportion
while
the
USA
had the highest point,
however
,
at the end
of the period,
Japan
becomes
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the country which had the highest
elderly
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number of elderly
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people. It is clearly seen that in the first 40 years of the period, the number of people who were over 65 in the
USA
and
Sweden
increased rapidly, at about 6%
whereas
it decreased slightly, at around 2% in
Japan
.
By contrast
, from 1980 to 2020, the data in the United
State
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even dropped slowly, but they went up nearly 5% in
Japan
,
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and reached a peak at about 20% in
Sweden
. Predicted figures
to
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for
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2040 rise
drammatically
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dramatically
for all of these countries, especially in
Japan
, at about 27%, around 23% and 25% for the
USA
and
Sweden
respectively.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • aging population
  • proportion
  • elderly
  • significant increase
  • surpass
  • gradual increase
  • crucial period
  • rapid increase
  • healthcare advancements
  • lower birth rates
  • projections
  • adjustments in social services
  • demographic dynamics
  • lifestyle choices
  • trends
  • notable
  • potentially
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