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Your friend has asked you to teach English to their child. However, you do not have any English books so would like to borrow some from your teacher. Write a letter to your teacher. In your letter say which course you are taking describe the type of books you need to borrow ask to borrow the books

Hello, dear Mr. Thompson. I hope, you remember me, my name is Anastassia, I
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studied in your
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 course for 3 years
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 of years ago. First of all, let me please, express to you my sincere admiration for your work, you
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 the best
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 teacher I have ever had. After your course I'm really
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 with my
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, people are asking me to teach their children. I'm writing
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 letter with the purpose of asking to get some study books from you. One of my friends asked me to help
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his children with their
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 classes. They are 10 years old, and I'm really not sure what kind of books I need for these sessions. I know that you were
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 school teacher in the past, so maybe you can
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 me
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 books I need,
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, I'll be happy to
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 them from you
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 the period I need to buy them. I desperately have to get
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, it
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 be great if you
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 help me. Looking forward to hearing from you. Best regards, Anastassia.

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coherence cohesion
Try to maintain consistency and clarity while expressing your thoughts. Rereading and editing can help polish your text.
task achievement
Make sure to directly address all parts of the task clearly and concisely. This can help in making your response more effective and complete.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is polite and respectful, which is highly suitable for writing to a teacher.
coherence cohesion
The letter has a clear structure with a greeting, a body, and a closing remark.
coherence cohesion
Each main idea is generally contained within its own paragraph, which helps in maintaining clarity.
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