Many people say that the only way to guarantee getting a good job is to complete a course of university education. Others claim that it is bette to start work after school and gain experience in the world of work. How far do you agree or disagree with the above views?
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Ensure that your essay directly addresses all parts of the prompt in greater detail. Include more specific examples or case studies to enhance your arguments.
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Avoid using overly general terms like 'student' and 'university'. Specify the types of degrees or fields of work where possible.
coherence cohesion
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coherence cohesion
Proofread to correct minor grammatical and spelling mistakes, such as 'complimented' which should be 'complemented'.
coherence cohesion
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