Your local government has just recently received a large donation from an anonymous donor to improve the community. Almost everyone agrees that the money should be invested in building a new public facility. Which of the following do you think your local government should build? Build a public library Build a public park Build a public pool

In
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present world, where life is a little bit difficult for us,large
donations
coming from different
individual
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is a big help for the improvement of
community
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. Even the government is among the many
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that needs
donations
from different people. But, it is agreed that
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donations
to the local government should be used for the improvement of the community so that people will benefit from it. First of all,the government should think
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these large
donations
will be used
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introduction conclusion
You should aim to provide a clear and comprehensive introduction that outlines the main points you will discuss in your essay. This helps set the stage for your argument and provides a roadmap for the reader.
relevant specific examples
Develop your main points with specific examples and clear explanations. This will help to illustrate your arguments and make them more convincing.
introduction conclusion
Make sure to include a conclusion that summarizes your main points and restates your opinion. This helps to provide a sense of closure to your essay.
general positive
Your essay demonstrates an understanding that the donation should benefit the community and that the government has a responsibility in deciding how to use it.
language
You used appropriate language and grammar for the task, which makes your essay easy to understand.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • donation
  • anonymous donor
  • community improvement
  • public facility
  • invested
  • literacy
  • educational resources
  • recreation
  • social interaction
  • physical and mental well-being
  • physical activity
  • swimming lessons
  • public health
  • community events
  • safety
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