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The Table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The Table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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The table compares the
number
 of transportation modes used in England in 1985 and 2000.
Overall
, it is evident that there was a
decrease
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decreasing
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 trend of walking, bicycle and local
bus
users
.
Wherease
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Whereas
, the remaining modes of
travel
 experienced a rising
number
. In 1985, people who walked was 255, but
this
number
 slightly
decrease
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decreased
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 to 237 walkers by 2000.
Bicycle
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Bicycles
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were
Unnecessary verb
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also
 showed
decreasing
Correct article usage
a decreasing
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 amount from 51
users
 in 1985 to 41
users
 by 2000, which made
bicycle
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bicycles
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became
Verb problem
apply
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the least
of
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apply
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travel
 mode used by that year.
Furthermore
, local
bus
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buses
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 had a significant rise from 429 to 274 at the same period of time.
Conversely
,
car
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the car
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exhibited
Verb problem
had
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 3199
users
 in 1985, making it the highest
travel
 mode used in that year.
This
number
 sharply climbed to 4806 by 2000 and remained the most popular transportation.
Then
, in 1985, train and other
transportations
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transportation
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 were 289 and 450, respectively. These numbers rose gradually to 366 and 585 by 2000.
Long distance
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bus
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buses
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 was 54 in 1985,
meanwhile
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meanwhile,
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taxi
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taxis
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 had only 13, making the lowest mode of
travel
 used in that year. Both of them,
however
, increased their numbers by 2000,
bus
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the bus
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 became 124 and
taxi
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the taxi
a taxi
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 was 42.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, bus, users, travel with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • mode of travel
  • popularity
  • decline/increase
  • public transport
  • urbanization
  • infrastructure
  • economic factors
  • environmental impact
  • urban planning
  • technological advancements
  • data points
  • trend
  • usage
  • comparison
  • implications
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