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The chart shows the average daily minimum and maximum levels of air pollutants in 4 cities in 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows the average daily minimum and maximum levels of air pollutants in 4 cities in 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The Bar chart illustrates the rate daily minimum and maximum levels of air pollutants in 4 different cities
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 as Mexico
City
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, Beijing,
Calcutta
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 and
Los
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Angeles
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 in 2000. The number is measured in
micrograms
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 per m3.
Overall
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, Mexico
City
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 was the top
city
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 producing SO2 and N2O at daily highest and lowest
level
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levels
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 every single day.
In contrast
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,
Los
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Angeles
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 was the metropolitan with the lowest pollution of SO2 and
Calcutta
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 was the town with the lowest maximum N2O production but Beijing was the area with a daily minimum N2O level. Mexico
City
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 was the top producer of both SO2 and N2O among the other countries, with 200 and 207 respectively. Minimally the place produced 80
micrograms
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 of SO2 and 113 of N2O which is even higher than the one produced in
Los
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Angeles
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 which is the second-highest area to produce N20 at 104
micrograms
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. Surprisingly, SO2 in
Los
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Angeles
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 was as low as 10
micrograms
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 at maximum and 2 at minimum which is the lowest compared to the other cities. The second biggest
city
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 which emitted SO2 was the capital of China. Exactly 100 grams of the gas polluted the air, but minimally only a quarter of it was released into the air. Compared to Beijing,
Calcutta
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 had about 50% of Beijing’s maximum and minimum SO2 production with 59% and 47% milligrams. Both Beijing and
Calcutta
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’s N2O maximum
emission
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emissions
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 were similar in number, at 54 and 52 milligrams, yet at the lowest,
Calcutta
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 had 30 milligrams and Beijing’s production was only roughly half of that of
Calcutta
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.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city, calcutta, los, angeles, micrograms, n with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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