Topic: Some people argue that technological advancements have made our lives easier, while others believe that they have led to increased stress and isolation. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Technological developments have made our
lives
easier than
the
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past. We rely on technology
at
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in
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every
aspects
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aspect
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of our
lives
such
as health, education, workplace, entertainment and communication. We can easily communicate with others,
watch
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movies without going to theaters.
Moreover
, technology has brought velocity
in
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our
lives
. We can easily complete our tasks within a shorter period of time compared to the past. It not only saves our time but
also
our energy.
For example
, we can send
email
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with a single click, or we can watch movies without going to
tcinema
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the cinema
hall.
Therefore
, I believe that technology has made our
lives
more faster and easier.
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task achievement
Your essay addresses the topic and provides a clear stance that technological advancements have made our lives easier. However, to fully achieve the task, ensure you discuss both views as mentioned in the prompt before giving your opinion.
coherence cohesion
While the essay maintains a logical flow, it can be enhanced by adding connectors and transitional phrases to ensure smooth progression between ideas. Additionally, consider elaborating more on your points and introducing a conclusion to summarize your main arguments and restate your opinion.
task achievement
The essay provides relevant examples, such as the convenience of sending emails and watching movies without visiting a theater, to support the points made.
coherence cohesion
The ideas presented are clear and easy to comprehend, making the overall argument easy to follow.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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