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You are advised to spend about 20 minutes on this task. The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. » You should write at least 150 words.

You are advised to spend about 20 minutes on this task. The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. » You should write at least 150 words.
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The tables represent the
informations
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of
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sales
 of coffee and
bananas
 in Fairtrade-labelled in
a
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the
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 period of 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. At first glance, both fruits gained
an
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increasing
sales
by
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over
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the
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time.
UK
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The UK
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 topped the charts for coffee
sales
 in 1999 and 2004,
while
conversely
, it was the country with the least
sales
 of
bananas
. The top
sales
 of
bananas
 held by Switzerland. The closer perspective
further
 depicts
among
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that among
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 the European countries,
UK
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the UK
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 gained
an
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 significant
increased
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of
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in
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 coffee
sales
 that touched 20
millions
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of
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Euros by
the
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2004.
Whereas
, there wasn't a significant changes
of
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in
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sales
 for the rest of the countries. The different thing goes to
bananas
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sales
, with Switzerland being the country with the highest banana
sales
, by touching 47 million Euros of
sales
 in 2004. Sweden
exprerienced
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experienced
 a decreased
sales
 of
bananas
 which dismount 0.8 number of
sales
 from the previous year.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, bananas with synonyms.
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