You are advised to spend about 20 minutes on this task. The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. » You should write at least 150 words.

You are advised to spend about  20 minutes on this task.

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

» You should write at least 150 words.
The table below shows the
sales
of Fairtrade-labelled
coffee
and
bananas
in 1999 and 2004 with different amounts of millions of
Euros
. It is
showed
Wrong verb form
shown
show examples
in different countries
such
as (
UK
Correct article usage
the UK
show examples
, Switzerland, Denmark, Belgium, and
Sweden
). It can be seen from the table that the highest
sales
of
coffee
in 1999 were made in Denmark with a significant
amount
of 1.8
million
euros
.
While
in
Sweden
it had the lowest
amount
of people that purchased
coffee
in 1999 with an
amount
of 0.8
million
.
While
the
sales
of
bananas
in the year of 1999 the most
sales
were done in Switzerland with a high
amount
of 15
million
. The lowest
sales
were done in Belgium with a low number of Euro which is 0.6
million
. Moving on
by
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to
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the year
of
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apply
show examples
2004 we can see that
Denmarks
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Denmark's
Denmarks'
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ranking
of
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in
show examples
coffee
sales
went down by a lot, which now by 2004 the highest ranking was taken by the
UK
. The
UK
has earned up to 20
million
Euros
in
sales
. The
sales
have
went
Change the verb form
gone
show examples
up by 18.5
million
.
Still
Add a comma
Still,
show examples
the lowest
sales
of
coffee
is
Change the verb form
are
show examples
in
Sweden
with an
amount
of 1
million
.
Since maybe
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Maybe
show examples
drinking
coffee
in
Sweden
isn't popular compared to other countries in
the
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apply
show examples
European
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Europe
show examples
. The
amount
of
bananas
sold in the year
of
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apply
show examples
2004, Switzerland still remains on top with a high
amount
of 47
million
Euros
. In 2004
Sweden
has
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had
show examples
the lowest
amount
of
bananas
purchased . In
conclusion
Add a comma
conclusion,
show examples
we can
telll
Correct your spelling
tell
that in the
UK
it is getting more and more popular to get
coffees
Fix the agreement mistake
coffee
show examples
.
While
for
the
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apply
show examples
other countries
coffee
isnt
Correct your spelling
isn't
as popular as it is in the
UK
.especially
Correct your spelling
especially
for the
Sweden
peoples
Fix the agreement mistake
people
show examples
. For the
amount
Change the quantifier
number
show examples
of
bananas
sold it
has been
Wrong verb form
was
show examples
popular among the
Switzerlands
Correct your spelling
Switzerland
to buy
bananas
from 1999-2004.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, coffee, bananas, euros, uk, sweden, amount, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amounts" was used 10 times.
Vocabulary: The word "went down" was used 2 times.
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