The bar charts below show the percentages of men and women in employment in three countries in 2005 and 2015.

The bar charts below show the percentages of men and women in employment in three countries in 2005 and 2015.
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The charts
displays
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the
employment
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proportions of men and women in three countries between 2005 and 2015.
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,
Canada
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, South
Korea
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and
Sweden
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are dominated with the
employment
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of
males
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in both 2005 and 2015. Deriving from
this
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trend, a significant rise in
percentage
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the percentage
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of female
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can be
further
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observed
for
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Canada
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and
Sweden
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. In 2005,
Canada
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,
Sweden
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, and South
Korea
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had just below 40%, above 40%, and 30% respectively, in terms of working females. All experiencing the same trend, an increase in
percentage
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the percentage
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of female
employment
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to around 50% for
Canada
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and precisely 50% for
Sweden
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whereas
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aroung
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around
37% for South
Korea
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. An inclining trend can be observed in the proportion of working
males
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in
Canada
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and South
Korea
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. Previously with around 60%
males
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in 2005 transforming into a 70% of
males
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employeed
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employed
.
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,
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Sweden
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in Sweden
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male employees had gone through a decrease in
fraction
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a fraction
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of the
countires
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countries
employment
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. Previously with just below 80% into 70% in 2015.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words employment, canada, korea, sweden, males with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "just below" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar charts
  • percentages
  • employment
  • countries
  • 2005
  • 2015
  • trends
  • differences
  • changes
  • men
  • women
  • variations
  • patterns
  • significant
  • observations
  • summarize
  • findings
  • predictions
  • future trends
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