The table shows data about underground railway systems in six major cities with date opened, kilometres of route and passenger numbers per year in millions.

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The given table illustrates the data about subway systems in 6 metropolises around the world including opening dates, the

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of paths, and

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numbers annually.

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, It seems that London was the first town to inaugurate its metro in 1863 and

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with the most distance routes of about 394

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. Meanwhile, Paris and Tokyo were placed respectively in the second and third positions with 199 and 155

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, Los Angeles was the

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city that set up its railroad transport.

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, London transported 775 million individuals yearly albeit the most railroads which was not much compared to Paris and Tokyo with fewer underground instructures. Indeed, there is not any straight correlation between the extent of the rail systems and the number of commuters. Anyway, the highest number of passengers in about 1927 in millions

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back and forth in Tokyo per year. And Paris was the second town with the most passengers about 1191 million people yearly.

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, Kyoto and Los Angeles had the shortest railroads respectively at 11 and 28

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, thereby logically Los Angeles with 50, and Kyoto with 45 million travelers had the least number of passengers.

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extensive network
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date opened
major cities
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The table shows data about underground railway systems in six major cities with date opened, kilometres of route and passenger numbers per year in millions.

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation. Such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both points and express your opinion.

In certain nations, parents have high academic expectations for their children, resulting in limited leisure time. What could be the potential benefits and drawbacks of this for the children and the society they are part of

2. Some people think that children should start school at a very early age, but others believe that they should not go to school until they are older. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Some people view teenage conflict with their parents as a necessary part of growing up, whilst others see it as something negative which should be avoided. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Today more and more people wants things instantly (e.g.: goods, services, news,). Why is it? Is it positive or negative development?