The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph shows
an
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the
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average weekly spending by families in 1968 and in 2018. There are 8 kinds of
spendings
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spending
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. In 1968, the
most
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largest spending was food with 35%,
on the contrary
, in 2018, it decreased to around 17%. It is half of the
number
in 1908. About Housing, the rate was 10% in 1968, but In 2018, the
number
had grown up to approximately 18%. Fuel and power
was
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the least spending in both years, which were about 5%. Clothing and footwear was the same
number
as Housing in 1908. It had declined to
the
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half by 2018. Household goods remained steady from 1968 to 2018
with
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at
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8%. Personal goods lost the popularity, decreased from 8% to 4%.
In contrast
, Transport had
got
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gained
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popularity, in 1968, it
spended
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spent
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8% of
weekly
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the weekly
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expense
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expenses
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, but in 2018, it got 14%. Leisure shows
the
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an
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exceptional
rising
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rise
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. The
number
in 2018 was over twice in 1908.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • compare
  • spending patterns
  • allocated
  • weekly income
  • significant changes
  • essential items
  • food
  • housing
  • clothing
  • leisure
  • communication
  • increase
  • decrease
  • twofold rise
  • substantial increase
  • quadrupling
  • declined
  • food and drink
  • slight increase
  • prioritizing
  • necessities
  • transitioned
  • portio
  • non-essential items
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