The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of britain. The table shows where the moneys came from and the charts show how it is distributed.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of britain. The table shows where the moneys came from and the charts show how it is distributed.
The table compares the police budget in two different
years
in one city,
while
the pie chart illustrates how much the expenditure is in three categories.
Overall
,
it is clear that
the budgets for the two
years
were similar to each other,
however
, there was a minor rise in the total. It can be seen that the majority of the income was spent on police officers and other
stuff
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salaries during the period.  Looking in more detail at financial sources, the National Government gave it
the
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large amount of the police
budgets
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, with 177.5
million
pounds
and 177.8
million
pounds
, respectively.
Whereas
the Local Taxes came in second stage with more than 91
million
pounds
in 2017 and grew to 102
million
pounds
in 2018. The number in the other source was similar,
such
as grants with 38
million
pounds
in 2017 and around 38.5
million
pounds
in 2018. There was a gradual upturn in the total budgets from approximately £304.7
million
to £318.6
million
pounds
.  Turning now to how the money was spent in both
years
, salaries accounted for the largest proportion of devoted, making up 75%,
while
the percentage dropped
that
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the following year with 69% of the sum.
According to
the data, in 2017 the technology allocation was only 8%, after that, in 2018, the technology roughly doubled their percentage to 14%.
Finally
, buildings and transport remained relatively stable at 17%
at
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both
years
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words years, million, pounds with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • budget allocation
  • funding sources
  • expenditure categories
  • fiscal year
  • operational efficiency
  • resource allocation
  • personnel management
  • National Government
  • Local Taxes
  • Miscellaneous revenues
  • Salaries
  • Technology
  • Buildings and Transport
  • budget distribution
  • financial trends
  • allocation shifts
  • budget increments
  • expenditure patterns
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