The pie chart below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart exposes the differences between a variety of retail sectors in New Zealand like travel, film/music, books and clothes.
This
data refers to the
years
2003 and 2013, confronting different percentages.
Overall
,
it is clear that
the market in
this
country has changed over the
years
.In fact, no product has shown the same percentage in both
years
examined.
For example
, travel was the main sector in 2003 with 36% in the first stage, though, dropped to 29% in 2013.The lead was taken by the film/music sector, which had an improvement of 12% in ten
years
, occupying a third of all sales in the final stage. The worst sector in 2003 was books, which had 19%.
Therefore
this
result got better by three percentage points in 2013 reaching 22%.
In contrast
to
this
result, clothes which were almost a quarter of the entire market at the beginning, crawled down by 8% ending with 16%, closing with the worst result ever registered.
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