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The chart shows the average number of hours each day that Chinese, A,erican, Turkish and Brazilian tourists spent doing leisure activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019.

The chart shows the average number of hours each day that Chinese, A,erican, Turkish and Brazilian tourists spent doing leisure activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019.
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The bar graph illustrates the rate of the number of
hours
 each day at different
activities
 (at the beach, reading books, and visiting
places
) that Chinese, American, Turkish, and Brazilian
tourists
 spent
holidy
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holiday
 in Greece in August 2019.
Overall
, it can be seen that reading books was the most popular activity that Chinese
tourists
 prefer.
Whereas
, visiting
places
 was the less preferred.
According to
 the chart Chinese and American
tourists
 fluctuated in the number of
hours
 each day in three different
activities
 which were reading books was the most
dominot
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dominant
dominate
 visit at around 8 and 5
hours
 respectively.
While
 the visiting
places
 were the least preferred at around 1 and 3
hours
 respectively.
On the other hand
, Turkish and Brazilian
tourists
 witnessed a decrease in the number of
hours
 in three different
activities
. The most
intersting
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interesting
noticable
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noticeable
 was that the most popular was at
activities
 spent at the beach at around 5 and 6
hours
 respectively were the least preferred
while
 the visiting
places
 were the least
preferd
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preferred
 at around 3 and 2
hours
 respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, activities, places, tourists with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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