the diagram below shows the life cycle of a salmon, from egg to adult fish

the diagram below shows the life cycle of a salmon, from egg to adult fish
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The process
initially
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begins with
drying
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the drying
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of raw animal
skins
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to remove moisture.
Subsequently
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, the dried
skins
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are efficiently transported to a factory, where they undergo a thorough washing using a mixture of water and lime.
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washing process thoroughly cleanses the
skins
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of any impurities, preparing them for
further
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treatment. Immediately after, the
skins
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are soaked in a lime solution, which softens and prepares them optimally for the next stages.
Following
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this
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, the
leather
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is treated with tannin, a combination of water and vegetable matter, in a crucial step known as tanning.
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treatment significantly strengthens the
leather
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, making it durable and resistant to decay. Once the tanning is complete, the
leather
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is passed through a mechanical roller to be evenly flattened, ensuring it has a consistent texture and thickness. In the final stages of the process, the
leather
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is carefully polished to enhance its appearance and achieve a smooth, refined finish. After polishing, the
leather
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is immediately ready to be utilized in the production of various goods
such
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as bags, shoes, and other accessories.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words skins, leather with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Life cycle
  • Salmon
  • Spawn
  • Egg
  • Alevin
  • Fry
  • Parr
  • Smolt
  • Freshwater
  • Saltwater
  • Adaptation
  • Physiological changes
  • Habitat
  • Predators
  • Survival
  • Ecosystem
  • Migratory patterns
  • Reproductive cycle
  • Environmental factors
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