You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: Should private schools receive government funding? Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 254 words.

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of
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apply
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peoples
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people
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says that
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
should spend
budget
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the budget
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for
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to
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support private
school
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schools
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.
Due
to
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to this
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, it will help
development
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develop
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education
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the education
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system. In my opinion, they should not be
fouded
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founded
funded
by public money, private
school
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schools
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already have
highly profitable
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high profits
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from
school
tuition and private
school
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schools
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are a
bussiness
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business
created to seek profit like other
bussiness
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business
businesses
.
To begin
with, nowadays
average
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the average
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of private
school
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schools
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is
more
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apply
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increasing for
demand
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the demand
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of parents that want to give the
woderful
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wonderful
thing
for
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to
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their
child
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children
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so education is main essential for
children
, several
family
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families
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belive
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believe
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aboy the expensive tuition can
garuntee
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guarantee
quailities of their
children
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children's
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life. Since, the negative news about private
school
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schools
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like, in my hometown
techer
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teachers
use a
vilence
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violence
with the
kidergarden
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kindergarten
student resulting in serious injury or some
school
teachers are unable to take care of all
children
because of the different numbers, which may cause
children
to be naughty and have accidents. Owing to, lower or in some poor area is free
school
tuition.
Hence
,
school
institution is
indemand
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in-demand
in demand
for
parent
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parents
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todays
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today
.
Moreover
, currently these private
organisation
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organisations
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there are many new courses being promoted as relevant to today's globalized life.
For instance
, some private
school
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schools
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are advestising that they
focused
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focus
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on technology and start teaching students
kindergarden
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kindergarten
ages so or in some
school
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schools
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garuntee
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guarantee
that their student
access
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have access
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in
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to
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top
university
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universities
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of
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in
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countey
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countries
and worldwide.
While
,
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apply
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public
school
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schools
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have a problem with the number of teachers being
in contrast
to the number of students. The budget is not enough for every
school
, so the budget should be used to manage government schools to have better quality than before.
To sum up
,
goverment
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government
authorities should take care
managing
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of managing
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the
buddest
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budget
for
develop
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developing
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education
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the education
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system with every public
school
especially
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, especially
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in poor
area
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areas
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. For
the
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this
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purpose
raise
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raising
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the standards of the
school
and
build
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building
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confidence among parents to erase the stereotype of state schools that are not of quality.
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task achievement
Ensure that your argument is clearly presented in the introduction. Your stance on private schools not receiving public funding is clear, but the reasons supporting your opinion could be more precisely stated upfront.
coherence cohesion
Be careful with grammatical errors and ensure your sentences are grammatically correct. This will make your points clearer and easier to understand.
coherence cohesion
Try to avoid run-on sentences. Breaking your ideas into shorter, distinct sentences will help present your arguments more clearly and improve readability.
task achievement
You have provided relevant examples to support your points, such as the issues faced by private schools and the benefits provided by public funding in poor areas.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has an introduction and conclusion, successfully framing your argument.

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