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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?n?

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The debate over the future of all vehicle species will be
driverless
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. Has become a major issue in recent years.
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 there are several advantages to automatic transport systems. There are
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 some disadvantages that must be considered.
This
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 essay will explore both sides of
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 matter. First and foremost, I do believe that in the future technology will enhance significantly in terms of
cars
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, buses, and trucks.
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, it is predicted that in the next few years, we will no longer need
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human beings
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 to drive vehicles.
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, it will make our
life
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 much easier. And more efficient.
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, It will improve our health.
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, my father had health problems in his back
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 the fact that he had to drive 4 hours a day to get to work. For that reason, I think
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driverless
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cars
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 could save a lot of time and effort.
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, one of the main drawbacks of new
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cars
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 is that we can not rely 100% on machines. Yes, technology improved a variety of areas in our lives. But it
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 takes a lot from us. And it could reduce our intelligence because we depend on machines. Another disadvantage is the cost of these kinds of transport. It will be expensive to buy.
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, in
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 there was a similar car with an AI system that cost nearly 1 million dollars. And that could be a real issue. In conclusion,
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driverless
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cars
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 offer some drawbacks
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 as high cost.
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, the advantages
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 as saving time and effort.
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, enhances the healthcare. Outweighs the disadvantages by far.

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coherence cohesion
The essay could benefit from a more polished logical structure. Make sure each paragraph transitions smoothly to the next. For example, consider linking the advantages and disadvantages more clearly.
task achievement
The response is complete, but the conclusion needs to be more definitive and should summarize the main points more clearly.
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It would be beneficial to offer some more relevant specific examples or evidence to support your main points. This will not only strengthen your argument but also improve clarity.
coherence cohesion
Try to avoid simple sentence fragments. Combining related sentences can make your writing more cohesive and easier to follow. For instance, instead of saying 'Therefore, it will make our life much easier. And more efficient.', combine with a conjunction: 'therefore, it will make our life much easier and more efficient.'
coherence cohesion
The essay introduces and concludes the topic, keeping the focus on the prompt throughout.
task achievement
The arguments are relevant and cover both advantages and disadvantages of driverless cars.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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