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It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to be become a good sportsperson or musician. discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is that some people
born
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 ,with talents or any person can be taught to become talented. There is no absolute agreement on whether children should be talented by birth or
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 field of knowledge or skill can be learned. A commonly held belief is that abilities in
such
 fields as
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, music ,art and science
genetically
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 embedded and run in
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.
According to
this
 point of view,
human
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born
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 with certain characteristics, which
makes
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him
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 prone to success in specific
area
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. As evidence of
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 they point to Mozart. He started to compose his first works at age five. His
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extraordinary ear for music and ability to create music were noticeable from childhood, which is evidence of innate
talent
.
Moreover
, Leonardo da Vinci, one of the greatest geniuses in
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history, showed exceptional skills in different ways, including art, science, engineering and anatomy. His intuitive knowledge and creativity went beyond simple learning and
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 often explained as the result of natural genius.
On the other hand
, some people think that every
talent
 can be developed by hard
work
, practice and persistence.Research shows that regular
trainings
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training
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 and purposeful
work
 can compensate lack of inborn ability.
For example
, they may mention Michael Jordan.
Greatest
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The greatest
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 basketball player was excluded from
school
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the school
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 basketball team, cause
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 did not see enough potential in Michael.
However
,
instead
 of giving up, Jordan started to practice with unbelievable insistence and expanded his skills
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such
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, that he became one
f
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 the greatest athletes in
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history.
In addition
, Thomas Addison - mighty inventor. He said that
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 success was
result
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the result
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 of 1
percent
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 of inspiration and 99
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 of sweat. He claimed that his achievements came
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from
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 continuous experiments, failures and hard
work
. In conclusion, taking everything mentioned into account I would say that
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 factor of accomplishment
it
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is not only
talent
,
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 but passion, practice and desire to improve yourself.
At
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 the end,
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a
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combination of natural
talent
 and hard
work
becoming
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ideal
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an ideal
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 condition for achieving outstanding results.
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grammar
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elaboration
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cohesion
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task response
You have successfully presented both sides of the argument, and your essay shows a clear understanding of the topic.
introduction conclusion
The introduction and conclusion are effectively present, giving your essay a strong start and a comprehensive end.
examples
The examples used (Mozart, Leonardo da Vinci, Michael Jordan, Thomas Edison) are relevant and well-chosen to support the main arguments.

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