It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to be become a good sportsperson or musician. discuss both these views and give your own opinion
One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is that some people combination of natural
born
,with talents or any person can be taught to become talented. There is no absolute agreement on whether children should be talented by birth or Add a missing verb
are born
every
field of knowledge or skill can be learned.
A commonly held belief is that abilities in Correct word choice
whether every
such
fields as sport
, music ,art and science Fix the agreement mistake
sports
genetically
embedded and run in Add a missing verb
are genetically
family
. Correct article usage
the family
According to
this
point of view, human
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humans
born
with certain characteristics, which Add a missing verb
are born
makes
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make
him
prone to success in specific Correct pronoun usage
them
area
. As evidence of Fix the agreement mistake
areas
this
they point to Mozart. He started to compose his first works at age five. His Add a comma
this,
an
extraordinary ear for music and ability to create music were noticeable from childhood, which is evidence of innate Correct article usage
apply
talent
. Moreover
, Leonardo da Vinci, one of the greatest geniuses in the
history, showed exceptional skills in different ways, including art, science, engineering and anatomy. His intuitive knowledge and creativity went beyond simple learning and Correct article usage
apply
is
often explained as the result of natural genius.
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are
On the other hand
, some people think that every talent
can be developed by hard work
, practice and persistence.Research shows that regular trainings
and purposeful Change the wording
training
pieces of training
work
can compensate lack of inborn ability.
For example
, they may mention Michael Jordan. Greatest
basketball player was excluded from Add an article
The greatest
school
basketball team, cause Add an article
the school
couch
did not see enough potential in Michael. Capitalize word
Couch
However
, instead
of giving up, Jordan started to practice with unbelievable insistence and expanded his skills on
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to
such
level
, that he became one Correct article usage
a level
f
the greatest athletes in Change preposition
of
the
history. Correct article usage
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In addition
, Thomas Addison - mighty inventor. He said that,
success was Remove the comma
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result
of 1 Add an article
the result
a result
percent
of inspiration and 99 Change the spelling
per cent
percent
of sweat. He claimed that his achievements came Change the spelling
per cent
by
continuous experiments, failures and hard Change preposition
from
work
.
In conclusion, taking everything mentioned into account I would say that key
factor of accomplishment Correct article usage
the key
it
is not only Correct pronoun usage
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talent
,
but passion, practice and desire to improve yourself. Remove the comma
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At
the end,Change the preposition
In
Add an article
a
the
talent
and hard work
becoming
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becomes
ideal
condition for achieving outstanding results.Add an article
an ideal
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examples
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