task 2 the money spent on space research has brought enormous benefits to mankind, but it could be more usefully applied. how far do you agree?
It has been noticed that even though outer-space studies bring significant advantages to
human kind
, it Correct your spelling
humankind
better
to be used Add a missing verb
is better
elsewhere
. I completely agree with the latter argument, as there are other current problems and important research fields that need government's
attention.
One evident reason for space research should be de-prioritized is that the world has more pressing issues that require immediate attention Correct article usage
the government's
such
as poverty, education and healthcare. Furthermore
, areospace
studies require considerably large funds and advanced equipment. Correct your spelling
aerospace
Hence
such
funds can be more useful on above mentioned global issues. For example
, if a country could spend that much on educational
Correct article usage
the educational
system's
advancement Change noun form
system
instead
, there will
be more educated professionals Wrong verb form
would
which
Correct pronoun usage
who
will
eventually Wrong verb form
would
involve
in fast Wrong verb form
be involved
economical
growth in the long run. Correct word choice
economic
Likewise
, if spent on infrastructure, then
better
standard of living for the society as a whole.
Correct article usage
a better
On the other hand
, most of such
astronomical projects yield no results. Furthermore
, they have a tendency to cease after many years of wasted resources, once they reach a dead-end where the probability of such
is very high. Hence
such
funds and money can be spent on other research with definite results such
as on
medical, technological and environmental fields. Change preposition
in
For instance
, vaccine
for Covid 19 has been one of the greatest inventions Add an article
a vaccine
the vaccine
happened
in recent history. It can be seen how important they can be than space findings to Verb problem
apply
the
Correct article usage
apply
human kind
.
In conclusion, world money can be spent on more important Correct your spelling
humankind
economical
and sociological issues and other projects where its advantages are vast and far more beneficial than the positive effect space studies Replace the word
economic
has
to offer.Correct subject-verb agreement
have
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task achievement
The essay should aim to provide a balanced viewpoint by mentioning both the benefits and the challenges of space research. Currently, the essay heavily focuses on why funds should be reallocated, but does not equally delve into the advantages of space research in enough detail.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that every paragraph clearly links back to the main argument. While the paragraphs are generally coherent, some sentences can be made more explicit in explaining how the points relate to the overall argument.
introduction conclusion present
The introduction and conclusion comprehensively cover the main idea of the essay, making your stance clear.
logical structure
The essay presents a logical structure, with each paragraph discussing a specific point in support of the main argument.
supported main points
The main points are well-supported with relevant examples, though they could be more specific.