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The graph below shows the number of oveseas visitors who came to the UK for different purposes between 1989 and 2009

The graph below shows the number of oveseas visitors who came to the UK for different purposes between 1989 and 2009
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The line graph illustrates information about the rate of foreign visitors segmented based on their
aim
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 of visiting the UK into Holiday,
Business
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 and seeing loved ones from 1989 until 2009 at with 5th interval. From an
overall
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 perspective, it is readily apparent that despite the fluctuating patterns observed in all categories, they were an
increase
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 trend throughout.
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, it seems that the UK is the Mecca of the spending holiday.
To begin
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 with holiday purpose, it is obvious that its initial
number
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, which was higher than 6 million, was
further
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 from the others, and it dramatically rose until achieved approximately 10 million
travelers
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travellers
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 in
this
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aim
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 before dropping to under 8 million. After the decline, it significantly surged. The
number
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 of people with a
business
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 trip
aim
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 was shown two drops in 1994 and 2004 in which both of them met the
travelers
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travellers
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 with the
aim
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 of meeting acquaintances. There was a dramatic and parallel surge for both groups surrounded by the two mentioned drops.
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 the
number
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 of
the
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travelers
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travellers
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of
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for
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 these two aims met each other, the level of the popularity of the UK to visit
friend
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friends
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 and relatives never suppressed the rate of a
business
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 trip.
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, after 2004, the
number
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 of friends’ and relatives’ visitors fell slightly, meanwhile,
tendency
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a tendency
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 towards a
business
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 trip faced
with
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a decline after a noticeable surge.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words aim, business, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "drops" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "surged" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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