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You have received a letter from your neighbour complaining about noise from your house/flat. Write a letter to your neighbour. In your letter explain the cause of the noise apologise for the noise describe what action you will take to solve the problem Write at least 150 words.

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Dear Sim, I am writing
this
 letter to let you know the reason
of
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for
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 the
noise
 problem you are getting from my house.
Firstly
, I am extremely sorry for the problems you are facing from
noise
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the noise
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 of our house. So, the reason
of
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for
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noise
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the noise
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 is because of children .
Everyday
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 they are busy for the whole day
in
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 their school after that they
goes
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 for the tuition. In the evening, they only have some time to play with
there
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their
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 friends.
Everyday
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 their friends come to our house to play with them. So for one to two
hours
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 they play
videos
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 games which
makes
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to
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too
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 much
noise
.
However
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 from
tomorrow
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 they are going to play in
park
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the park
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everyday
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. So,
in
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a result
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result
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 you will not hear any
noise
 after tomorrow. Hope you will understand. Yours sincerely San
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Coherence and Cohesion
Try to use paragraphs effectively to separate different ideas or points you are making. This improves readability.
Task Achievement
Make sure to proofread your letter to correct minor grammatical errors and ensure clarity.
Task Achievement
Consider using more formal language and structure in your apology. For instance, instead of 'problems you are facing from noise of our house', you could say, 'the disturbances caused by noise from our house'.
Task Achievement
Your response covers all required points of the task: explaining the cause of the noise, apologizing, and describing actions to solve the problem.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your closing statement is polite and shows empathy for your neighbour's situation.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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