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In the future nobody will buy printed newspaper or books because they will able to read everything they want online without pain do you agree or disagree

#future #nobody #newspaper #books #pain
In
this
 modern era,
every one
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 is using
the
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modern technology products
such
 as phones, tablets and computers. So, it's pretty clear that in the future no one will use
newspapers
 and
books
.
Firstly
, in today's
time
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people
 don't want to waste
there
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their
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 money on
the
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newspapers
 and
books
 because they know that these are available online. In the past, old
people
 used to get
newspapers
 every morning with
there
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their
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 first tea in the morning. But, nowadays they are using
there
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their
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 phones and tablets for the news
as well
as
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and
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 if they want to read any book they just search
on
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online and
they
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get the information.
Secondly
, no one wants to waste
there
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their
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time
, as you know
time
 is very precious in
this
 busy life.
For example
, my grandfather used to go
in
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to
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 the library to
spent
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there
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their
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time
 and to read
the
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books
. But
know
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now
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 they
stays
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 at home because whenever
,
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 he wants to read something he
use
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uses
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google
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Google
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. So we can say that in the coming 5 years, out of 100
people
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people,
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 only 2 or 3 will read
newspapers
 or
books
. In conclusion,
due to
 hectic
lifestyle
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lifestyles
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people
prefers
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prefer
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 to google everything even if they need just small information.
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