The chart below shows infromation about Heart Attacks by Age and Gender in USA. Summarise the infromation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart provides
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number
of men
and women
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heart
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of men
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heart
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higher compared to Correct subject-verb agreement
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women
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as both genders grow older they're at higher risk.
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look at the chart reveals that, between ages 29 to 44, 123,000 Replace the word
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men
experienced a heart
attack
which is almost 40 times the number
of women
. From 45 to 64 years old, the number
of men
experiencing a heart
attack
grows to 424 thousands
and the Change to singular
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number
of women
also
reaches 136 thousands
, between these ages we can see the biggest gap between these two genders. For people that are 65 or older, the growth in Change to singular
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male
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number
of women
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significant
reaches
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thousands
from 136 Change to singular
thousand
thousands
, in Change to singular
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this
age group we can see the gap between genders declines to less than 100 thousands
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thousand
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