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The chart below show UK and USA energy consumption in 2000 and 2006. Summarize the information y selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below show UK and USA energy consumption in 2000 and 2006. Summarize the information y selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart above illustrates the distribution of the
consumption
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 of
energy
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 in a variety of sources in the UK and the USA between 2000 and 2006. Generally, there has been a decrease in the
consumption
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 of coal and nuclear,
while
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 the
consumption
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 of
gas
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 has increased. Coal was one of the major
energy
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 sources for the two countries in 2000 at 35% and 30% respectively,
however
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,
such
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 a trend in
gas
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 usage has
deciled
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declined
decided
 significantly to 25% in the US and 15% in the UK in 2006.
Gas
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 was
a
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an
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energy
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 source with the most significant increase in the
porpotion
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proportion
portion
 of
energy
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 usage, with the US's
gas
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consumption
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 rising from 15% to 25% and the British figure almost doubling in 2006 at 40%, making it the
perdominant
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predominant
 source of
energy
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 for Britain.
While
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 the
consumption
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 of Nuclear
energy
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 accounted for a similar
porportion
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proportion
 in the US over the years, the usage of
energy
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 in the UK has nearly been halved to a level below 10% in 2006. For "oil" and "other renewable sources", percentages over the years have remained at similar levels with only minimal fluctuations presented.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, energy, gas with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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