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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy, and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy, and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph illustrates the
amount
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 of CO2 that individuals in four European countries emitted from 1967 to 2007.
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, the United Kingdom and Sweden showed a declining tendency
whereas
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 Italy and Portugal produced a larger
amount
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 of CO2 in 2007. The United Kingdom is the country with the largest emission of CO2 and Portugal with the least
througout
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throughout
 the whole examined period. Starting from the countries with a larger
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 of
the
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emission of CO2, Portugal experienced the most dramatic rise from about 1 metric ton to above
5metric
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5 metric
tonnes
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 in 1997, from which it rose more mildly until 2007 when it reached below 6 metric
tonnes
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.
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, Italy
also
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 produced a larger
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 of CO2, from just above 4 metric
tonnes
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 in 1967 to just below 8 metric
tonnes
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 in 1997.
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 the graph for Italy remained unchanged until 2007, standing much higher than Portugal. Turning to the graphs with a downward tendency, the United Kingdom demonstrated a constant drop from below 11 metric
tonnes
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 to approximately 9 metric
tonnes
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 for the four decades
although
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 it still stood at the highest of all. Sweden
also
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 experienced a more radical decline from 1977 when it reached
the
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 peak at over 10 metric
tonnes
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 to below 6 metric
tonnes
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 in 2007 in spite of a sharp increase from nearly 9 metric
tonnes
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 to just above 10 metric
tonnes
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 in 1977.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, co, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stand" was used 2 times.
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