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The graph shows the number of people taking part in 4 kinds of sports in a particular region between 1985 and 2005.. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the number of people taking part in 4 kinds of sports in a particular region between 1985 and 2005.. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The
line
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 graph above depicts information about
a
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the
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 total
number
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 of
people
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 who playing in 4 different sports in a certain area from 1985 to 2005.
Overall
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, it can be seen that
rugby
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 and tennis have a significant differentiation
while
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 basketball and badminton have
a
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the
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 same pattern of
line
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.
First,
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the
line
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 trend of
rugby
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 between 1985 and 2005, was
continously
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continuously
 downwards until hit the bottom in 2005 with only 50
people
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 who played it. Meanwhile, at the same time, tennis experienced a
smoothly increased
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 from time to time. Interestingly, in 1995,
rugby
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 and tennis
have
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had
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 a similar
number
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, which was 200
people
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. On the other sides, basketball started
around
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with around
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 90
people
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 and in 1995, the
number
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was
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stagnated. In 2005, the
number
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was still remain
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still remained
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.
Last
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line
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, badminton began
about
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with about
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 51
people
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.
Then
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, in 1995, the
number
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 was decreased to 50. Afterwards, in 2005,
rugby
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 and badminton
have
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had
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 an equal
number
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 which was 50.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words line, number, people, rugby with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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