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The graph shows the number of people taking part in 4 kinds of sports in a particular region between 1985 and 2005.. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the number of people taking part in 4 kinds of sports in a particular region between 1985 and 2005.. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The
line
 graph above depicts information about
a
Correct article usage
the
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 total
number
 of
people
 who playing in 4 different sports in a certain area from 1985 to 2005.
Overall
, it can be seen that
rugby
 and tennis have a significant differentiation
while
 basketball and badminton have
a
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the
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 same pattern of
line
.
First,
the
line
 trend of
rugby
 between 1985 and 2005, was
continously
Correct your spelling
continuously
 downwards until hit the bottom in 2005 with only 50
people
 who played it. Meanwhile, at the same time, tennis experienced a
smoothly increased
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smooth increase
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 from time to time. Interestingly, in 1995,
rugby
 and tennis
have
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had
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 a similar
number
, which was 200
people
. On the other sides, basketball started
around
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with around
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 90
people
 and in 1995, the
number
was
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stagnated. In 2005, the
number
was still remain
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still remained
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.
Last
line
, badminton began
about
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with about
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 51
people
.
Then
, in 1995, the
number
 was decreased to 50. Afterwards, in 2005,
rugby
 and badminton
have
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had
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 an equal
number
 which was 50.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words line, number, people, rugby with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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