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The graph below shows different sources of air pollutants in the UK from 1990 to 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows different sources of air pollutants in the UK from 1990 to 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the four different types of
air
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pollution
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 emitted in the United Kingdom between 1990 to 2005 in
million
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tons
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.
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, it can be seen from the diagram there all three types of
pollution
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 were decreased except transport was stable after minor fluctuations.
However
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, the total
air
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 pollutants were significantly declined in that period. It is conspicuous that the highest
pollution
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 was transmitted by total
air
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 pollutants, it was 7
million
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tons
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 in 1990, after that it fell dramatically and reached
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4
million
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tons
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 in 1999,
further
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, it plunged to 3
million
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tons
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 after oscillation.
In addition
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, the second highest industry, which produced 5.5
million
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tons
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 in 1990,
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it
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shrunk to 3
million
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tons
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 and reached 3
million
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tons
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 in 1996, after that it plummeted to nearly 2
million
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tons
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 in 2002 and touched 2
million
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tons
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 in 2005. Probing ahead, it can be experienced the transport did not make any major changes it emitted 1
million
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ton
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tons
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 in 1990, after some movements it plateaued to 1
million
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ton
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 in the next fifteen years.
Furthermore
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,
the
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households
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air
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pollution
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 was 1
million
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ton
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tons
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 in 1990 and it
continues
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 decline and
finally
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 touched 0.2
million
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ton
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 in 2005.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words air, pollution, million, tons, ton with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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