Some people believe that it is good idea to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valued to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some people think that including all of the
informations
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known by the author in a scientific paper,
business
idea
, and study is a crucial thing. But others argue that keeping the most important and valuable information may be necessary. Writing everything
that is
related to a
business
or study is important so a continuous improvement can occur.
Because if
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we hide things from the public,
then
innovations will be limited to
one
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our
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own’s
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mind and will never be achieved as soon as possible.
For example
, a scientist is obligated to write his or her paper as detailed as possible so others can improve the research.
Hopefully
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as
result
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a result
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,
further
advancements can be made.
However
, keeping some important information as a secret is a key to some because if we publish all of the data to the public, a similar
idea
may arise without the consent of the
owner’s
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. If
this
is the case,
then
a competition between the holders of
these similar
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this similar idea
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idea
may collide.
For example
, there was a conflict between two owners of
spicy
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fried chicken restaurant in Indonesia. One claimed that the competitor was mimicking their
business
.
However
, the other argued that the recipe
informations
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information
pieces of information
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were
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spilled
to
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much to the internet so it is legal to copy the
business
. Personally, I think that keeping the key ingredients or ideas
privately
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is wiser, both in the context of research or
business
.
Alhough
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Although
innovations are needed nowadays, I think intellectual rights are
also
as important. As a conclusion, sharing as much knowledge as possible is brilliant to create better findings in the future.
Nevertheless
, it is
also
important to value an
idea
by keeping it all by yourself.
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You have a clear introduction and a conclusion that summarizes your position effectively.
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You provide relevant examples to support your points, such as the scientific paper and the business competition scenarios.
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Your essay overall has a logical structure with separate paragraphs dedicated to different aspects of the discussion.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • collaboration
  • accelerates progress
  • innovative discoveries
  • transparency
  • open access
  • verify results
  • fraudulent
  • ethical practices
  • consumer trust
  • potential risk
  • misuse
  • sensitive information
  • genetic data
  • defense-related technologies
  • proprietary information
  • trade secrets
  • competitive edge
  • value
  • investment of time and resources
  • compensation
  • disincentivize
  • recoup costs
  • balanced approach
  • policies and agreements
  • sensitive data
  • fair compensation
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