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The line graph illustrates the population of three counties, Columbia, Yamhill and Washington state of Oregon which increased over 60 years, between 1940 and 2000. Washington has the highest population of three counties in 60 years

The line graph illustrates the population of three counties, Columbia, Yamhill and Washington state of Oregon which increased over 60 years, between 1940 and 2000. Washington has the highest population of three counties in 60 years
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The line chart shows the amount of people in three countries namely Columbia , Yamhill and the Washington state of Oregon from the
year
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 1940 to 2000.
Overall
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 , the most significant feature of
this
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 graph is the average number of the population increased over 60 years and recorded their maximum figure in the
year
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 2000.
To begin
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 with, the Washington state of Oregon citizen's number was 75
thousand
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 people
then
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 in the next 30 years it rose gradually to approximately 125
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, the number inclined again but
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 time sharply to record a peak at almost 240 in the
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 2000.
On the other hand
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, at the beginning of
this
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 period, Columbia and Yamhill had about the same figure and it was at 30
thousand
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 than in the
year
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 1970 it went up by 50
thousand
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 for Columbia and 150
thousand
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 for Yamhill respectively
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, the population increased one more time but by stronger rate than the
last
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 time to record 75
thousand
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 and 90
thousand
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words year, thousand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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