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In many countries people are living in a throw away society where things are used for a short time and throw away. what are the causes of this and what problems does it lead to

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It is fair to say that we all are living in a very fast-paced world, where there are some places which have transformed completely into a throw-away society. There is an enormous peak in
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 as observed by scientists. In
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 have very busy schedules nowadays
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they do not think twice before throwing anything.
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, because of internet trends,
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, the famous "buying in bulk
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" individuals buy the
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 without thinking about whether they need it or not. They just get it because of a
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, that too in bulk, and
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 after showcasing it on public platforms they just throw it away or never use it again.
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, when
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 watch something going viral on the internet, they want it too as they get tempted after watching so many
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 having it and they
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, they throw it without making proper use of it, once it is out of
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. There are
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 number of issues arising
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 production is enhancing day by day which is detrimental to the environment. It is one of the leading causes of pollution as well
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 some places, proper
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 management is not there.
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 leads to the second issue i.e. danger for animals. When
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 management is not proper, many animals get harmed because sometimes they eat the
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 on roads and streets, which enters into their food chain, ultimately leading to the death of the animal.
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, the hard work of
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 who make
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 goes in vain when the consumers do not use it properly. In conclusion,
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 should mindfully buy things and once they think the
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 cannot be used they should recycle or reuse it. The government should
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 pay attention towards
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 management as well.

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task achievement
You have provided a clear and comprehensive response to the task, addressing both the causes and consequences of a throw-away society. Ensure that you include even more specific examples to strengthen your arguments.
coherence cohesion
Your essay is logically structured with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. However, work further on ensuring smooth transitions between paragraphs and points, and make sure each point is fully developed and clearly connected to your main argument.
overall
There are some minor grammatical inaccuracies and repetitive words (e.g., twice usage of 'proper'), hence pay attention to vocabulary range and grammar correctness.
task achievement
Your introduction is clear and sets the tone for the essay. It effectively introduces the topic and states that you will explore the causes and issues.
task achievement
The body paragraphs effectively identify various causes and consequences of a throw-away society, making your stance quite clear.
coherence cohesion
You have a well-defined conclusion that summarizes the main points and also provides a call-to-action, enhancing the overall effectiveness of your essay.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Obsolescence
  • Consumerism
  • Sustainable practices
  • Environmental impact
  • Depletion of natural resources
  • Landfills
  • Pollution
  • Greenhouse gases
  • Social inequality
  • Marketing strategies
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