The table shows the production of milk annually in four countries in 1990, 2000 and 2010.

The table shows the production of milk annually in four countries in 1990, 2000 and 2010.
The chart compares data about the productivity of
milk
in 4 countries,mainly the
Netherlands
,Australia,Tanzania and
Guatemala
between 1990 and 2010.
Overall
,
it is clear that
poor
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though
Guatemala
's production was at the start,the
Netherlands
was at the top in 1990.
Additionally
,
yearly
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production of
Guatemala
tripled in 2010. At the outset,
although
people in the
Netherlands
produced over 11 and quarter
million
litres
of
milk
in 1990, Tanzanians got only 87
thousand
litres
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this
year.If Australian cows gave 11
million
246
thousand
litres
of
milk
in the start,people in
Guatemala
got only 26
thousand
litres
.
Furthermore
, after ten years
Netherlands
' and Australia's numbers decreased to 11.155
thousand
and 11.105
thousand
litres
respectively. In 2000 amount of
Guatemala
's data doubled to 55
thousand
and Tanzania's cows gave more than 140
thousand
litres
.
Moreover
,Despite of
Netherlands
' amount jumping to about 11 and half
million
litres
,Australia's score fell to over 9
million
litres
of
milk
in 2010.
In addition
, people in
Guatemala
earned 84
thousand
litres
in 2010,155
thousand
litres
of
milk
given by cows in Tanzania.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words milk, netherlands, guatemala, million, litres, thousand with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "gave" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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