Some people think that the government should use extra money to fund programs to improve the environment. Others think that it is better for the government to spend money to support artistic programs. Which option do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

There is an ongoing debate about whether
government
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should spend extra money to improve
environment
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the environment
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. Some
people
think
this
is necessary work for our
world
,
whereas
others argue that funds should be invested in artistic
fields
.
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essay agrees that more money should
fund in
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eco-friendly programs. On the one hand,
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the authority
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authority
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authorities
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should spend more resources
into
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on
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environmental
protaction
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protection
programmes.
Environment
is the
future
of all human beings. There is only one
world
for us. As the largest public management unit,
government
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the government
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is responsible
to protect
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for protecting
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people
's
future
lives.
In addition
, making
investment
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investments
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in
environment
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the environment
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could improve everyone's quality of life.
For example
, Singapore was
commited
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committed
in
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to
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building
as
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apply
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a garden city. With its
environment
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environmental
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improvement, the local residents' lifespan had a
signigicant
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significant
increase and
get
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to
top
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the top
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in
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the
world
now.
On the other hand
, some
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individuals
inviduals
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individuals
strongly believe that it would be better to put money into artistic
fields
,
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because
becasue
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because
art can enrich
people
's
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spiritual
spritual
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spiritual
world
. In fact, there is a realistic issue that we must consider
is that
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:
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how can we allow the limited resources to produce maximum effects
.
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Investing
environment
is investing
people's
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in people's
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future
. With the improvement of
environment
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the environment
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, everyone will have a better life quality, so they can pay more attention to the
fields
that they are interested
.
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in.
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This
will
also
indirectly contribute to the development of
arts
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the arts
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. In conclusion,
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the authority
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authority
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authorities
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should cost more
fundings
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funding
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into
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to
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environment
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environmental
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programmes.
Although
arts
is
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are
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important to our
spritual
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spiritual
world
, the investment
for
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in
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environment
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the environment
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is the investment for all
fields
of
people
's
future
.
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Grammar and Punctuation
Work on refining your grammar and punctuation to ensure clarity and correctness. For example, 'commited' should be 'committed' and 'protaction' should be 'protection'.
Supporting Details
Try expanding on your supporting examples. For instance, provide more detailed data or additional specific examples to strengthen your arguments.
Task Response
Your essay clearly presents and supports a position.
Coherence and Cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are effective and contribute to the overall coherence.
Logical Structure
You have logically structured your essay with clear main points and contrast established between the two viewpoints.

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You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • allocate
  • allocate funds
  • environmental conservation
  • renewable energy
  • sustainable development
  • protect wildlife
  • reduce pollution
  • promote sustainability
  • artistic development
  • cultural expression
  • creative industries
  • nurture talent
  • artistic innovation
  • enrich society
  • budget allocation
  • prioritize
  • public opinion
  • government responsibility
  • social welfare
  • public wellbeing
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