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It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician.

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everybody’s
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everybody
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 has talents.If they
would be
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were
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 taught,we and they
can
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could
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 discuss
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 problem. Children’s interests
maybe
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may
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 not
open
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be open
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.But special people,or their
parents
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,
friends
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friends,
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encourages
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encourage
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 them,they can teach
to
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them to
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 become a good person.Children’s interests are so important.Their
parents
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 or friends should open
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 if they encourage it will happen.The
child
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 should be given hope.If
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 is
not
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not,
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 he will never be talented.The main focus
,
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apply
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should be on the
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child’s
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 mood.Sometimes,
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child’s
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a child’s
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 mood
maybe
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may be
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discuss
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discussed
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this
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 problem. As soon as possible
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child’s
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 talents are not opened,it
is
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may
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 maybe difficult.
Although
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child’s
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a child’s
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 interests are not,their
parents
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 will arouse
it
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them
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. And they can do it.
Enthuasism
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Enthusiasm
play
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 a big role. The person who
are
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is
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 interested in talents
,
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apply
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don’t
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doesn’t
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 waste their time. It is
also
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is
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apply
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important.
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Child’s
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 talent
maybe have
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may be
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 and he will work
it
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on it
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. is
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is
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a
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apply
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great. If we compare that people are born with a talent and
other
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others
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 are not. We may open and discuss step by step that
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child
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the child
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 is not talented will
will
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apply
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remain like another
child
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child
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 is born with a talent or just
a have
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has
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. So they have to improve it.If
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child
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a child
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 can not
,their
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Their
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parents
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 should do it. They may give hope,a lot of
motivations
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motivation
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,
give
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and give
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 a chance to improve it.
Parents
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 should
have
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pay
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 attention. In
conclusion
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conclusion,
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child’s
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children’s
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 or everybody’s
parents
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 and
friend
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friends
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 should give a hope,
motivations
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motivation
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,
a
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and a
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lot of chances.He can be talented and can become talented and
succed
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succeed
.
Parents
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 should be attentive and always believe in their children’s hidden potential.

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task achievement
Make sure you have a clear introduction that explains what you will discuss.
coherence and cohesion
Create clear links between ideas to help the reader understand your points better.
task achievement
Use specific examples to support your ideas and make your essay stronger.
positive
You show a strong belief in the potential of all children.
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Your conclusion summarizes your main points well.

Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Innate talent
  • Nurture
  • Prodigy
  • Proficiency
  • Deliberate practice
  • Physiological factors
  • Grit
  • Perseverance
  • Cultural norms
  • Structured training
  • Physical predisposition
  • Natural aptitude
  • Dedicated training
  • Societal influence
  • Passion
  • Genetic endowment
  • Skill acquisition
  • Expertise
  • Extracurricular activities
  • Mastery
  • Cognitive abilities
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