WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The diagram below shows how one type of coal is used to produce electricity. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

WRITING TASK 1

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The diagram below shows how one type of coal is used to produce electricity. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
This
diagram provides key information about the recycling of coal and how it
used
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is used
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to produce electricity.
Overall
, the picture above shows how coal is a crucial part of
this
process.
However
, it is not the only important part of
this
project, which is the transportation, without a way to transfer the coal you can not make electricity from
this
black rock.
On the other hand
, let us analyse the picture, it is clear to the naked eye that we
gets
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get
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the coal from the Mine and we smash it into little pieces. Following,that, we put the crushed coal inside the truck to transfer the coal to the Gassefier. After that it will be no longer coal, it will be Gas and some solid waste. After we
finish
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finished
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this
step we took the gas to the Gas power plant, giving us the Electricity ,we needed and, Heat waste.
After
this
long journey, we can
finally
enjoy the power in our homes and the
industrial
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industry
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as
we'vell
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well
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • hopper
  • pulverizing mill
  • combustion
  • boiler
  • steam
  • turbine
  • generator
  • mechanical energy
  • electrical energy
  • transmitted
  • power lines
  • efficiency
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