WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The diagram below shows how one type of coal is used to produce electricity. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
This
diagram provides key information about the recycling of coal and how it used
to produce electricity.
Add a missing verb
is used
Overall
, the picture above shows how coal is a crucial part of this
process. However
, it is not the only important part of this
project, which is the transportation, without a way to transfer the coal you can not make electricity from this
black rock.
On the other hand
, let us analyse the picture, it is clear to the naked eye that we gets
the coal from the Mine and we smash it into little pieces. Following,that, we put the crushed coal inside the truck to transfer the coal to the Gassefier. After that it will be no longer coal, it will be Gas and some solid waste. After we Change the verb form
get
finish
Wrong verb form
finished
this
step we took the gas to the Gas power plant, giving us the Electricity ,we needed and, Heat waste. After
this
long journey, we can finally
enjoy the power in our homes and the industrial
as Replace the word
industry
we'vell
.Correct your spelling
well
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