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The diagram below shows how one type of coal is used to produce electricity. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how one type of coal is used to produce electricity. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram illustrates the necessary processes to generate electricity using coal. Generally, the process
involve
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involves
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 mining, transporting, and generating energy.
Firstly
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, as the source for generating
elecricity
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electricity
, blocks of coal, extracted from a mine,
is
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are
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 crushed into smaller parts for the convenience of future procedures. The coal was
then
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 loaded
to
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onto
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 a trolley that carries the coal from the mine
,
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apply
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 and transferred to a truck
which
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and
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 the coal was delivered to the
Gassifier
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gasifier
. Once the coal
has
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had
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 arrived, the coal was
gassified
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gasified
classified
 from a solid form to
gas
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 by the
gassifier
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gasifier
classifier
,
while
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 solid waste
remianed
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remained
will
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would
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 be
disposed
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disposed of
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. After that, the coal
gas
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 was cooled by a cooler which the
gas
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 is
then
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 proceeded to a
gas
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 power plant. At the
gas
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 power plant, electricity was generated by the turbines, which were powered by the coal
gas
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 supplied, with heat waste
additionally
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 generated. Ultimately, the electricity generated will be provided to houses and industries nearby.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words gas with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • hopper
  • pulverizing mill
  • combustion
  • boiler
  • steam
  • turbine
  • generator
  • mechanical energy
  • electrical energy
  • transmitted
  • power lines
  • efficiency
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