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Some students prefer classes with frequent discussions between the professor and the students with almost no lectures. Other students prefer classes with many lectures and almost no discussions. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays,
students
 hold different attitudes towards the mode of teaching. Some
students
 tend to discuss more with
professor
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while
 others are not interested in expressing themselves but more likely to be engaged in the lectures.
This
 essay will discuss both sides and convey my ideas towards them.
It
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 is no doubt that
discussions
, as parts of teaching, can motivate
students
 a lot. The most important reason is that when
students
 are engaged in the
discussions
, they can think deeper about the topic and check their understanding through asking questions and
given
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feekbacks
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feedback
feedbacks
. In that case,
students
 can be filled with a sense of achievement, which is the
motives
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 for meeting their learning needs and
help
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 them to become
an independent learners
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independent learners
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.
However
, only using the way of
discussions
 to teach can not be effective all the time.
Students
 are advised to receive enough input so that it can be promoted into
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 to help their learning. In
this
 situation, giving
lectrures
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lectures
 to
student
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students
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 seems to be
value
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 because it can help
students
 a lot in their receiving stage. In conclusion, I hold the point that using lectures
supplimented
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supplemented
 with
discussions
 can be more effective than just using one mode of teaching.
Students
 are advised to adapt to both kinds of teaching and try
their
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to be
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engaged
 in the class to improve themselves.
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Try to use more specific examples to support your points. For instance, you might mention particular subjects or scenarios where discussion or lecture is beneficial.
task achievement
Work on grammatical accuracy and vocabulary usage. For instance, 'feekbacks' should be 'feedback' and 'lectrures' should be 'lectures'.
coherence cohesion
Attempt to develop the ideas in each paragraph more fully. Adding more depth can make your argument stronger.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion which helps in understanding your viewpoint.
coherence cohesion
Main points are well-supported, making the essay logical and cohesive.
task achievement
You have responded to the prompt adequately by discussing both views and giving your opinion.

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