The diagram below shows how one type of coal is used to produce electricity. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
The process chart illustrates the production of
electricity
by one type of coal mineral.
Overall
, extraction
of coal from the mines Correct article usage
the extraction
ndergone
a number of processes to produce Correct your spelling
undergone
electricity
, such
as mining, crushing, transporting, cooling, cleaning and send
to Wrong verb form
sending
gas
plant
for Fix the agreement mistake
plants
further
supply electricity
to users.
It is conspicuous that the first step Change preposition
of electricity
to
mine the raw coal from the mine and crush it in small pieces to make it ready for transportation by trucks, Add a missing verb
is to
Secondly
, it transported
to the gasifier, which Add a missing verb
is transported
produce
heat and Change the verb form
produces
gas
. Furthermore
, the gas
send
for cooling and it produces waste heat and Wrong verb form
is sent
remaining
Correct article usage
the remaining
gas
undergone
for cleaning process.
Probing ahead, the purified Wrong verb form
undergoes
gas
then
sends
to Wrong verb form
sent
gas
plants, where it produce
waste heat and Correct subject-verb agreement
produces
rest
is pure Correct article usage
the rest
gas
, which produce
Change the verb form
produces
electricity
, which uses
for factories and Wrong verb form
is used
power houses
. Nextly, the stored Correct your spelling
powerhouses
electricty
in power stations, Correct your spelling
electricity
transmitted
for use in houses and businesses. Add a missing verb
is transmitted
Moreover
, this
process continues again and again to keep running appliances and factories.Submitted by rbtech65 on
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, gas with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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