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The diagram below shows how one type of coal is used to produce electricity. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

#type #electricity #summarise #information #features #comparisons
The process chart illustrates the production of
electricity
 by one type of coal mineral.
Overall
,
extraction
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the extraction
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 of coal from the mines
ndergone
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undergone
 a number of processes to produce
electricity
,
such
 as mining, crushing, transporting, cooling, cleaning and
send
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sending
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 to
gas
plant
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plants
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 for
further
 supply
electricity
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of electricity
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 to users. It is conspicuous that the first step
to
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is to
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 mine the raw coal from the mine and crush it in small pieces to make it ready for transportation by trucks,
Secondly
, it
transported
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is transported
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 to the gasifier, which
produce
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produces
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 heat and
gas
.
Furthermore
, the
gas
send
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is sent
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 for cooling and it produces waste heat and
remaining
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the remaining
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gas
undergone
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undergoes
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 for cleaning process. Probing ahead, the purified
gas
then
sends
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sent
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 to
gas
 plants, where it
produce
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produces
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 waste heat and
rest
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the rest
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 is pure
gas
, which
produce
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produces
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electricity
, which
uses
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is used
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 for factories and
power houses
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powerhouses
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. Nextly, the stored
electricty
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electricity
 in power stations,
transmitted
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is transmitted
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 for use in houses and businesses.
Moreover
,
this
 process continues again and again to keep running appliances and factories.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, gas with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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