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The charts below show the amount of financial aid that four nations received and how the money was spent in 1974 and 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The charts below show the amount of financial aid that four nations received and how the money was spent in 1974 and 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The charts depict the information on
given
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 budget in three categories and the expenditure
amount
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 in four different countries between 1974 and 2014.
Overall
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, it is evident that the distribution of financial
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support
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 showed a significant increase in all aspects and the
amount
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 of money paid out in all nations remarkably decreased.
To begin
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 with, in 1974, medicine contributed around 80
million
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, making it the largest
amount
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 received.
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this
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, catering and finance had a similar
amount
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 which was 70
million
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. By 2014, the number of medicine dropped to 60
million
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 by 2014. At the same time,
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 the finance aspect reduced to approximately 65
million
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, the catering
amount
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 sharply fell to nearly 15
million
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 which made it the lowest category. Moving to the table, South Africa had the highest expenses, accounting for 65
million
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 and 42
million
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 in 1974 and 2014, respectively. China had the second largest expenditure in 1974 with
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the total
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amount
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 of 62
million
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.
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, it plummeted to only 6
million
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 by 2014 which made it the bottom position of total spending.
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 Indonesia spent 55
million
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 to 30
million
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, Thailand paid out 48
million
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 to 18
million
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 from 1974 to 2014.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 6 times.
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